Kio ora this week for writing we had to write about a girl who came to a orpahage and gave some toys to the kids and here is my writng.
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Umbrella
Early one stormy morning, the door to Miss Elem’s Home for children opened fastly as the thunder got louder. The girl with the golden yellow umbrella stormed in and found a home for her golden umbrella. As the girl came in he quickly poked his head out the door so he was hidden from view. Standing off to the side, the girl stared at the happy scene as the children searched in the box for hidden treasures. The girl grinned as she watched the young boy racing round the room like an airplane. Quickly her smile faded as she looked to the umbrella stand and all she saw were puddles. Her umbrella disappeared.
Ki ora Archie That was such a great story I loved how described what the umbrella looked liked and yoused similes and conjunctions and I love writing It is my favorite subjected and all the words was spelled corecly you are a very good writer Archie keep up the good work By joe joe.
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